
I would condense the information about the tears and add more specifics about the actual tours. Of course I might just be saying that because I already know about teardrop trailers. I would put a bulleted list about what a teardrop offers. Something to the effect of
"Our teardrop trailers offer:
sleeping quarters for 2
your own kitchen area
etc, etc......"
If I were considering signing up for one of your tours I want to know, what places are we going to? what will we see? will there be a guide? how long is our trip? how much "free time" will I have? how much will it cost?
That's all I can think of right now.....

And Honeyman wanted me to add that we need to know who, what, where, when, why and how.
Hope this helps!

